Lilith,
dropping by, German Steve urged me ... :)
who stole all your smilies? :confused:

Skip,

great story, dense athmosphere, no lengthes, turns me really on! That wicked lady, wow! :).. Nice imagination Dan manages to tame her in the next story.

If you stop mixing up telling from 1st person /3rd person perspective, it will be perfect.

Waiting for your next story ..... shivering with with anticippp....pation! YUM! :)

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Greets,
Bernhard