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Old 11-22-2004, 12:42 AM
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OK...so I am dying to know....and not above a little self-promotion.

Now that my very first story is complete....

What did you think?
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Old 11-22-2004, 01:31 AM
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Hmmmmmm. Very sexy. Very err.. enjoyable. Sorry I was distracted and did not look at grammer or story structure. It was a fast paced lust filled story that I think many of us have wished for at one time or another. Enjoyed the visual images you created. I look forward to reading another in the future.
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Old 11-22-2004, 02:07 AM
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To put it rather bluntly....


it got my cock hard.
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Old 11-22-2004, 10:27 AM
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Darogle ~ That was the effect I was going for

campingboy: I believe the story-writing bug may have bitten me. I used to write a lot (mostly fiction of a non-erogenous nature) but I must admit this is my first work in about 10 years. Studying engineering and going into business has killed my creative skills ~ and I think I need to work on that. SO......I am looking for ideas for the next story if you have any.
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Old 11-22-2004, 03:14 PM
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i really enjoyed it. sexy and well written. a love story with a love scene...perfect.

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Old 11-23-2004, 02:55 AM
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I dont post much, maybe have once but i've been a member for a long time, just mostly browse. This story was really sexy, set a mood, and a scene in every post, i couldnt stop reading, rarely do i read a story from start to finish but this one i did. Great story. I think i enjoyed it so much because its so real, such a real senario, and could see myself. I know what its like to be away for a year from someone and finaly get that intimacy again. Its unreal. Hope you post more stories.
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Old 11-28-2004, 05:32 AM
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Osuche, it wuzzzzzzz terrrrifffficcccc......and if i didn't have a seat belt on my chair, i would have already slid off...yes, it made me that wet, reading it. Oh, I do look forward to reading more of your stories!!!!


*wanders off to buy more batteries*
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Old 03-04-2005, 09:10 PM
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ouche,

That's a great story. If you ever decide that you want to write for a living, you'd have a guaranteed buyer for your material.

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