Hi.

I'm new. I wrote a story about coming home early for lunch.

Any feedback?


Sunshine

Hi & welcome!

Here's a link to that story- Lunch

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One man's dream is another man's nightmare~~~~> §¤ Lilith ¤§
~>My Scribbles<~
==>Gone Shopping<== ~Just a Quickie~ *~A Celebration Vacation~* ~Surprises~ Sleeping With the Window Open
What Did You Do Today? Self Defense Class ~Short Sweet Snippets~ § Summer Spin § Story Challenge Submission Pajamas

My only complaint would be that it ended too quick. I wanted to hear more.

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In memory of my friend skip...
Go then, there are other worlds than these

Thanks.

It was my first shot at posting. I did put up another one that's quite a bit more.....um...descriptive, I guess.

Sunshine

Aqua pretty much summed it up for me too. Very nice.

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Writing as ShafterParker.

For those who like masturbation-type stories, I did another one about a striptease here: A Sexy Show

There's nothing more fun than a striptease.

Really liked it, short and sweet, reading your other stories and loving them.

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