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Now, to get back on topic...

My personal view is that since it is a sex story, people are going to either read it and get off or decide it's hard to read and move on. I don't make it a point to say a story has grammatical errors largely because I don't want to come across as rude, but also because I don't know enough about the rules of grammar to accurately convey any errors I might perceive.

I would encourage you to take whatever criticsm they have and try to objectively look at your story and see if it will improve what you have written. Look at best selling authors. They don't just write a story and publish it without someone going over it first. They need to go through and fix several things before the book is printed and shipped. If you take a hard look at your story and decide the changes they have suggested would take too much away, then leave it, but don't be so proud that you think all criticsm is worthless.

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