Now as some of you know I have written a very long story which is attached to my name as a signature. It is the instructor and student one. Anyway I posted this story on another site which some of you may or may not know. It is www.lustylibrary.com. Now don't get me wrong it is a good site for stories and not much else. Anyway their mods have to pre read the stories before they are posted. They said mine had incorrect grammer and I had spoken in the past tense. WTF???? I posted it here no problems and everyone understands it without a hitch. I have never had once lil or any other mod here tell me that my story needed work in the grammer department. I mean for fu#$'s sake its a sex story.

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The instructor and student
Secretary learns how to take a dicktation
The story of sister stephanie

Grammer police.

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Because you did not ask for editing. We openly allow submissions. Other sites proof and require editing or have a submission process. We edit only if asked or if someone breaks the rules. Constructive criticism never hurts. I have my students proof and help edit their peers work all the time.

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Calling Kelsey Grammer!

Serious note: Editing IS important if you honestly care about your story quality and even those who are good at self-editing can or might miss a few quirks with tense, grammar and most especially spelling. Best to have two or three experienced eyes have a look-see.

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It was a bit rubbishy that they said it was in the past tense - most stories are and personally I prefer them that way. Having said that, a lot of the back story did appear to be in the pluperfect tense which can make it a little bit strange to read - perhaps that's what they meant - in which case they should have bloody said so. No point in being Grammar Nazis if they don't understand grammar properly themselves.

Sorry - I too am a Grammar Nazi but at least I do know what I'm talking about!

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I have always been under the impression that if it is easy to read and flows to a reasonable degree without too much trouble, then where is the problem? When I first posted the story here which was a while ago, I have had quite a few people view it. Now if it was such an issue then someone would have said something at the end of the story about the grammer not being 110% spot on nor did I recieve any PM's in regard to this. But no one has said a thing. So I took this as a good sign.

Lou you said something that makes sense. No point in telling someone something is wrong and not have the backbone to show them. I no longer use that site for posting stories as they are a bit tight in the grammer department. I just thought I would share my frustrations with all of you.

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An erotic story
The instructor and student
Secretary learns how to take a dicktation
The story of sister stephanie

In all honesty, I had started to read your story and hadn't gotten past the first paragraph because I thought it was difficult to read. I read erotica to get off, and if I need to reread a sentence two or three times to understand it, it's counterproductive. I didn't bother to make a comment to you about it since many stories are like that, I didn't want to be rude, and English isn't my first language so I know my grammar isn't always spot-on either.

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I think Neige is spot on (and funnily enough, so is her grammar usually!) I have rarely found a story with perfect grammar (and probably rarely written one myself) so I tend not to comment on it.

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Any good sex story of mine would have to be written in the Future Tense.

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For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul.

Complete surrender should not just come at moments in which one faces overwhelming odds, but in the calm when it seems one is personally in complete control of one's life.

One presumes Mrs. WI won't be seeing this post!!

(Can you say ?)

DM

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Would it involve Chicken Marsala?

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Now, to get back on topic...

My personal view is that since it is a sex story, people are going to either read it and get off or decide it's hard to read and move on. I don't make it a point to say a story has grammatical errors largely because I don't want to come across as rude, but also because I don't know enough about the rules of grammar to accurately convey any errors I might perceive.

I would encourage you to take whatever criticsm they have and try to objectively look at your story and see if it will improve what you have written. Look at best selling authors. They don't just write a story and publish it without someone going over it first. They need to go through and fix several things before the book is printed and shipped. If you take a hard look at your story and decide the changes they have suggested would take too much away, then leave it, but don't be so proud that you think all criticsm is worthless.

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Though I am different from you,
We were born involved in one another.

For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul.

Complete surrender should not just come at moments in which one faces overwhelming odds, but in the calm when it seems one is personally in complete control of one's life.

Oooh! Aqua!!! Did you use that split infinitive just so I could come over there and teach you a lesson you'll never forget.......er...about English grammar of course?!

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Fruit flies like a banana"

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Oops, Busted!

Now just be sure to wear your sexy boots for the lesson, ok?

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Put me on wheels and I'll turn tricks.

Clever? Nah, I ran out of that years ago. But if you find this, let me know, k?
"The road goes ever on..." ~ Tolkien

In memory of my friend skip...
Go then, there are other worlds than these