beautiful...very well written, and i loved the ending...well, i'm off to read part 2!

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quite well written, if you are looking for some ideas for your next one (I assume that you're not finished with the siries) I would introduce another character, perhaps a male, or female if you prefer (although that would be quite a lot of pussy and not much cock to go around). And also perhaps some lesbian action as well, to put an interesting twist on things.

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